Wednesday, January 23, 2013

Alternate K9- DANNY BOY

NAME: Jean M. Malone
MENTOR: Stacey Lee
TITLE: Danny Boy
GENRE: YA Contemporary 
WORD COUNT: 60,000

35 WORD PITCH: The Renaissance Faire circuit is like being frozen in time, but musician Daniel and his brothers must let go of the past they’ve been trying to escape, if they're ever going to build a future.  

FIRST 250:
Today I lost my brother. 

Lost him, because I was thinking about meerkats while we took our last tramp through these northern Virginia woods. Lost him, because even though I don’t quite believe it’s true, we’re finally going home. Soon as I find Sully.

I scan every inch of the forest, but there’s no one there. Just more forest.

“Sully, catch up! It’s getting late,” I say. I listen hard for a response—a footfall, a cry for help—but all I hear is a breeze tousling the tree leaves and the whispers of gnats chasing each other across my face in a game of sweat-tag.

“Sully?” I call again, trying to mask the panic that rises from my stomach up into my throat.

I backtrack the way I think we came, but there’s no path. We were making our own. That’s why they warn you to keep on the path. If I’m not careful, I’ll find myself as lost as Sully. There’s nothing for it but to go back to camp, enlist the help of the others, face my father.

I make my way out of the woods to the field where we’ve been camped for the past month. Everyone else has already left. Our instruments, amps, and cords have all been stowed inside the camper. And my father’s in a temper, like I knew he would be.

“I said eight o’clock sharp, din’t I?” he says, his Scots-Irish brogue thick on account of his ire. 

1 comment:

  1. Could you please send the first fifty pages, along with a complete plot synopsis, to sdemic@talcotnotch.net

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